“The bloke is perfect, a dead ringer.  The girl is too short, work on the height of her heels and she’ll pass muster.”

The dresser obeyed and the couple was sent down, through the Ritz’s foyer, to the waiting car.

Mohamed Al-Fayed lifted the phone; “It’s time” were the only words he uttered.

All eyes in the room were glued to the images on the CCVT screen.  They watched the car pull away from the hotel, saw it enter the Pont de l’Alma road tunnel and observed the close proximity of the camera man on his motor cycle.

The motor cyclist overtook the car.  With that first flash and the ensuing bang of the car against the stone wall, the audience in the hotel room gave a collective gasp.  Diana heaved and was given a glass of water.

“Can we go now, Papi?” asked Dodi.

Mohamed embraced his son and kissed the woman who would never legally become his daughter in law.

“Go in peace, my children.  There is a tunnel at the end of the corridor.  A car will be waiting outside; I have asked James Dean to fetch you.”

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22 Comments Add yours

  1. oooh a version I’ve never thought of

  2. deepercolors says:

    Where did this one come from? Interesting idea. Kind of like a Twilight Zone episode. Did you guys ever get that old TV series there?

    1. theonlycin says:

      I don’t recall the TV series, dc.

  3. slpmartin says:

    Oh my…what an interesting story you’ve posited…how I wish it would be true in some ways…but now it’s bedtime and lord knows I need my beauty rest. 🙂 An excellent bit of writing and quite creative…good night my friend.

    1. theonlycin says:

      Hope you have a good sleep, Charles.

  4. halfp1nt says:

    Interesting take, Cin.

    1. theonlycin says:

      Thanks Shorty, maybe they’re having a fine old time with James Dean, Elvis and Monroe.

  5. adeeyoyo says:

    I was so engrossed in your story – until the end when I could not help bursting out laughing (good for me, lol)! Just imagine… Nice one, Cin!

    1. theonlycin says:

      hehehe, I had a bit of fun with this 🙂

  6. Naomi says:

    Now there’s an awesome outcome, Cin…BRILLIANT!! This is why you need to focu on that novel 🙂

  7. Thats really good, a very believable version.

  8. Good one, Cin.

    I’m torn, though, between wanting more of the story, and a desire for you to let it rest in the established format. Hyper-short fiction has always been a favorite.

    Presenting something so short that cultural knowledge steps up and fills in the details is a wonderful exercise.

    1. theonlycin says:

      Yes, Rik, it’s fine as it is.

  9. gospelwriter says:

    Nice! I like it better than the ‘true’ story… but what about her kids – are they in on it? Oh wait… sorry, I guess I’m somewhat attached to the fairy tale – maybe there were no kids? Absolutely love the James Dean touch in the end.

  10. nrhatch says:

    A happy ending . . . for every one but the stand ins! ; )

    Nicely done.

  11. souldipper says:

    Cin, did you write that knowing that people who have been DOA, but came back, actually experienced not knowing they were dead? Fascinating and grabbing.

  12. buttercup600 says:

    Awesome, your work needs to be published..there is no doubt in my mind!!! Mwah xx

  13. Kavita says:

    That was a smart plot there!! Fascinating really…

  14. colonialist says:

    Very clever. I love the chauffeur touch.

    Just to be sure I didn’t miss the plot, I take it that D and D were not really deddicated, and nor was JD!

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