FRIDAY FLASH 55: SECOND BEST

Mom should leave him; he’d like me better if I was far away; like my half-sister is.

I got first prize in the art competition.
He said Your sister got a distinction in Maths.
Mom replied For God’s sake shut up!

My stomach hurts today; Teacher’s chosen me to play the piano on the stage.

INSPIRATION:

 http://nrhatch.wordpress.com/2010/08/19/seconds-anyone/

http://g-man-mrknowitall.blogspot.com/

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43 Comments Add yours

  1. adeeyoyo says:

    Gee Cindy, I hope this is fiction…!

    1. theonlycin says:

      Sometimes fact is stranger than fiction adee …

      1. theonlycin says:

        *passes adee a kleenex*

  2. Madmom says:

    This makes me sad, Cindy.

    1. theonlycin says:

      Wouldn’t it be such a shame?

  3. Kavita says:

    Oww.. it’s all so complicated, isn’t it? Or do we just make it that way?
    Who’s to explain it to kids?!
    Who’s to make the parents understand?!

    Ahh.. a tight 55, Cin!

    1. theonlycin says:

      Thing is kids never forget words.

  4. granny1947 says:

    Oh wow…I feel the pain!

  5. brian says:

    i feel for this boy/girl….its tragic what we do to our kids…i see this all to often in teh eyes of the kids i work with…sad 55.

    1. theonlycin says:

      Cruelty is often very carelessly inflicted.

  6. G-Man says:

    Cindy…
    This was a PERFECT example of Flash Fiction 55!!
    Terrific contribution today…as always.
    I’ve felt like that before…
    You Rock The World Baby…
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End

    1. theonlycin says:

      Thanks Galen, love you madly.
      Will try for a bit of humour next week.

  7. Jamie Dedes says:

    Great Flash 55 … but have the sniffles now …

    1. theonlycin says:

      Had a lump in my throat writing it.

  8. Eric Alder says:

    Some people are never truly happy. A telling 55.

  9. Monkey Man says:

    So sad that people are made to feel like this. Well described and in only 55 words. My 55 is HERE .

    1. theonlycin says:

      Read it Monkey Man, genius 🙂

  10. gospelwriter says:

    my stomach hurts in sympathy, listening to that jerk of a father (stepfather?) – god! what children have to put up with…

    tight 55

  11. nrhatch says:

    Compelling post, Cin.

    Captures the angst of children who are not loved unconditionally with spot on accuracy. Adults should know better, and often do not. : (

    1. theonlycin says:

      The sins of the fathers …

  12. colonialist says:

    There are so many sad variations on this theme outside of fiction…

    btw – may we use any of yours in Writers’ Club on Letterdash? It has been revived and is currently on a Flash Fiction kick, as well as a Blog of Note.

    1. theonlycin says:

      Sure, use them all if you wish Col 🙂

  13. dustus says:

    Great 55! That last line seems to echo as if that kid has nobody to talk to about the nervousness of having to play piano in front of an audience. Excellent build up for that conclusion in few words!

    1. theonlycin says:

      Maybe I will flesh this out into a fatter story Adam.

  14. pattiken says:

    Sad, but too often true. When there are three children, though, it often seems like the middle child, who may get the least attention, grows up to be the most stable.

    1. nrhatch says:

      Speaking for stable (but oft time ignored) middle children everywhere, Thank You!

      1. theonlycin says:

        My brother is testament to both your comments 🙂

  15. buttercup600 says:

    Such a reality of life and a very sad one too. You have captured it to perfection my friend xx

    1. theonlycin says:

      Sad perfection though, thanks buttercup.

  16. ladynimue says:

    that was so much of a great write !! such understanding of emotions !

    1. theonlycin says:

      I appreciate your visit ladynimue.

  17. slpmartin says:

    Excellent snapshot of those types of interactions within a family…being the boy in the family I was spared such events. 😉

  18. Cheryl says:

    This was an exquisitely written 55 about something that’s so common because folks don’t think before speaking.

    Mine’s (55) Fifteen is far too young . . .

    1. theonlycin says:

      Your post is sad beyond words Cheryl.

  19. stilekke says:

    ….blunt knives cuts the the worst Cin…..

    1. theonlycin says:

      Yes, stilekke, and the first cut is the deepest?

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